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Review Blog Story: Uninvoked by anonymous

An anonymous author is writing a story about a girl--an outcast--who doesn't have magic in a world where magic abounds. She's rejected for this, living with other outcasts outside the city, and the tattoo on her face marks her as an indel, one without magic.

I find this concept fascinating because so many fantasy stories characterize the hero as special because of their magic. Magic is the symbol of destiny. Magic is the power of that sets the hero apart. Magic is what makes him special. Wheel of Time by Robert Jordan. Belgariad by David Eddings. Wizard's First Rule by Terry Goodkind. And of course, Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone by J.K. Rowlings, where not only does his magic make him special within the world but also he is more powerful than most wizards and set apart by the scar on his forehead.

Well, this heroine doesn't have magic. She is ordinary, just like us, but for her that ordinariness is a handicap in the midst of all that magical power.

But she has skills that the Duke needs to save his life from assassins. Can they offer her enough money for her aid? Will she help them? Maybe--if it suits her. Maybe not if it doesn't.

It is a very intriguing and entertaining story with typical rough draft issues. For one, it needs more in character development and details, but the plot seems sound. Furthermore, the author is doing an excellent job of raising questions to hook the reader and giving answers slowly to keep the reader's interest. I can see the potential with flushing it out and giving it a good editing ...

So check out the first chapter of Uninvoked to support a new author.

2 comments:

  1. Thank you so much for your review! I agree 100% with your assessment of Uninvoked. When I started putting this up, I had a complete "perfect" draft. Then I started adding stuff, and most of that is rough. x.x

    You're definitely right on character development and details. If you have any specific suggestions please let me know.

    I will write a post about your review monday so it has the whole week to be on my front page :)

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  2. Hey Rita! I just wanted to let you know that Uninvoked is making the slow, painful move to its own domain!

    You can view it here: www.uninvoked.com if you're interested in seeing the new look.

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